The first paragraph is hard to follow because you go back and forth from present to past tense. Also, the character Felix isn’t defined yet, which lead me to first believe that his hands were being pierced.

However, I did enjoy reading this. The last sentence really ties it all together.

Ok, I added a bit to try to indicate that felix is a different person than the one being nailed.

added a bit more and I think i like it a bit better now.

A very original take on the challenge executed with skill.

I would suggest anonymising Felix and Linus (since they’re not really important characters).

I felt that making the romans anonymous would be too confusing in this short a three character story

This is really bananas (in a good way). The last sentence will stay with me forever.

Man, u have one cool avatar & name here. Agree with other commenters that the opening sentence is not perfect, but the writing talent here is clear. Great, great!