I liked how you described the power of the bike and the rat’s nest of hair in particular. Also, it kinda surprised me when she turned badass with the part with the shotgun but I liked it. If there are any other sequels planned then you have to let me know, I’d like to see how you continue this :)

AWESOME! i like the way you peiced it toghter, PLZ MAKE ANOTHER ONE! :D

Great bit of story and really sets up for one heck of an adventure. I like that you avoided the temptation to make her entirely alluring by allowing the reality of the messed up, ratty hair. That middle paragraph got a bit bogged down in long sentences. Breaking them up might have helped.

My only question is, if the station is abandoned, why does she need to load her shotgun?

That one small quibble aside, I really like the mood in this story, and I will now go on to read the sequels. :)

Very nice descriptive flair. Good attention to details.