This is awesome — found that out as I tried to sequel it & think about it. Only problem is that the dialog should have been broken up a bit to slow things down and exaggerate / delay the action to make it more suspenseful. Streaming all that excellent work altogether didn’t allow the reader to appreciate the intense and “drawn out” moments you intended. Loved the work, just thought the format needed some dressings. 5 for sure!

I was actually going for dark humor — apparently it had too much darkness and not enough humor!

Thanks for the comment and the sequel! It’s so interesting to see the directions people take things.

This is fast and packs a big wallop. Nicely visualised.