Great descriptions… I haven’t read the previous posts, I don’t believe, but this was easy to pick up and visualize. I’m a bit confused by the ending, but I know I’ve missed a previous ficly that probably explains… good work, rose, as usual. This was less poetic and more prose, but still very effective!

I didn’t really follow the second half, mainly just whose face and what happened to it. You also have a past tense in the first sentence, then it’s all present tense. A lot of neat ideas and possibilities in here, just hard to access through the style and probably limits of ficly size.