In the 2nd paragraph, Robert, I think it should be “Kseniya, scoot over” and “Martin, sit”. It’s usual to separate using a comma the person’s name from the imperative that is directed at them.

In the 5th paragraph, it isn’t clear whether the “more” in the last sentence refers to police officers or passengers.

I am still so thoroughly enjoying this series. And by invitation, I have submitted my own humble offering. Thank you so much.