Very sad, if I followed it right, the unrequited love of youth. That second sentence and the one right after it are really hard to follow. All in all, it could use some clarification and fleshing out, but if it’s just venting, then I guess it’s served its purpose.

Yeah, making it more specific could work, but it’s pretty effective even when it’s intentionally left vague. Very melancholy.

This story actually came out quite differently than it was meant to.
It was originally a venting of frustration-I recently lost a promotion, due to a disparity of experience between my own and other candidate’s experience. I was informed prior to the announcement that I wasn’t eligible, and I wasn’t even allowed to compete, but still…I still hoped.
And so I needed to get out the bitterness.
Thanks so much for your suggestions, although I will probably leave as is, because right now I feel it best represents how I was feeling..frustrated enough that my articulation wasn’t perfect.
I’m going to keep this, and when I win my promotion-I’ll look back at this and be happy.
Thanks so much for your advice!

I like it as is. Yeah, the second lines took a second to set in, but in totality, it was great. For some odd reason, the piece got better once I knew the story behind it.
I hope you get the promotion next time! You’ll have to write a sequel called “Glee” or “Giddiness” or something.

I definetly will. Thanks so much for your support!

I really liked this. I know the feeling of telling yourself you won’t hope for something, because you don’t want anyone to know how badly you want it… the feelings really came through in this.