I like the visuals, and the idea of being struck by a scene and going into this sort of fantasy. The end bit got a bit choppy for me, and I could argue the logic. Still, a neat feel to it, and I like the overall idea and moment expressed.

Yeah, I had trouble with the ending ’cause of character count. But I appreciate the feedback.

Character count is a constant enemy, but provides a good exercise in conciseness.

I second THX comment. But I also like the contrasting aspects of this character: she is both a dreamer, but has a down-to-earth side which makes these sarcastic pop culture references. Might be worth exploring in a longer narrative.