Very fun setting, a sort of mundane but high stakes mission for the crew, like something that would really wind up being necessary, though not glamorous.

The light about aliens seems to pop up out of nowhere though. Maybe if it was just the start of a fresh paragraph?

yeah, i had to edit this way down.. lost it’s umph.

there’s a LOT going on here… was this extracted from your NANOWRIMO novel, Elsh? Great ideas and some good descriptions… a bit boggy though with all of it crammed in such a short space, especially because it sorta reads like it was posted here mid-story… I could be wrong though…? I think that only because the mis-spelled name thing at the beginning seems drifting all alone without much explanation as to why or how that is important to the story.

just introducing a new character. yeah I did edit down a much larger piece, but it is not a full novel, yet. ;) There IS a lot going on. It makes a big difference whether I write for one ficly, or whether i cut something down to fit in one ficly. obviously I need practice cutting. :)

and i know how to kill a series.. :/ someone write around this one.

Piloting a successful bovine extraction and re-inhabitation is no small task! If you’re setting the stage for a major comeback, then kudos! Killing a series? I don’t understand.

aww thanks Electric H! I figured no one wanted to sequel this and carry on the series. I have ideas, but they are wisps. I figured this installment was a dead end. Thus the ‘killing the series’.