very well written, still surreal. I guess he has no choice bu to follow the nightingale.

Its wow… Its so discriptive its SCARY.. O.O

Thanks, Micky & Elsha. You’re too kind! Just bored today & thought I’d sequel the original.

I like how you’ve not only continued the peotic feel the original had, but enhanced it— especially true in the second papragraph. But the whole story is poetic and very beautiful and wise— or at least there is a feeling of something wise. Truly cool, dude.

Thanks, Tad. I appreciate the feedback.

Nice! I love how you describe the voice in the wind to be “fissured”. It gives it wisdom and age.

A great piece. Probably should read the prequel now.

Very grim and dark with an air of tragedy. I’m not sure I know what’s going on, since I hadn’t read the prequel, but this seems weighty.

I think you could do without the ‘And’ at the beginning of the sentence about the voice in the wind, as well as the separate sentence to set up the quote. Seems like it could pack a bit more punch just reading: In the wind is a fissured voice, "Bloodstained winds…

Could just be a style thing, but there’s my two bits.

Yeah, THX, probably a good call. I’ll look at it again if I get time. Busy time of year!