Not bad at all. Watch your grammar. In front is two words, you’re missing a few apostrophes. Also make sure there’s a paragraph break when you start a new line of dialogue. Keep it up!
Not bad at all. Watch your grammar. In front is two words, you’re missing a few apostrophes. Also make sure there’s a paragraph break when you start a new line of dialogue.
Keep it up!
This is excellent. I’d love to see more. 5 pencils.
it’s beautiful. :) all i have to say
This was really good! You should keep writting
YaYa 
Elisabeth L. Davis(LoA) 
Ari Marx 
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