This is really clever. How creative of you to turn the character into a gun. Also, I like how the male figure made her feel inprisoned and restrained from life, but the female character set her free.
I really like this. Well done.

To be honest, I would love to see the 5 I’m going to give you reach 6+ status by eliminating the words has, was, happened, having. You area strong writer, but the passive voice wimps out the punch. Be more in your face! “The fight ended and we linked up. She sent reassuring thoughts as we…”

I’d like to say it was actually a conscious decision to use the passive voice in this case, given that the woman had been forced into one of the ultimate passive roles. I think it fits the character. She’s not thinking “active” yet.

But on the other hand, I do realize I kinda use passive voice a bit too much. So…