Classical and very well written. Good ending, good content. A pace setting first entry to the challenge and a high bar set.

Well done though I have a slight nit-pick. First off the idea of true Inspiration is wonderful. You have shown a truly life changing event. I could very easily see this adapted into a movie or perhaps an episode of a tv show where angels and demons are real and have a profound effect on the human race.

Ok the nitpick I have is in the formatting. Many of your sentences start with ‘I’ which makes them stand out and mildly interrupts the flow. Oh and the angel’s speaking part should probably be spaced out. Other than those (admittedly minor) nitpicks- great job!

Thank you very much for the feedback, Robert! I appreciate the opportunity to learn. I have changed the story a little to try to address your concerns.

I am a sucker for moons and angels. Very enjoyable.

Yeah, I think that works better. It flows better and doesn’t draw the attention to the bones (structure) of the piece. Happily, I think you’ve earned your 5th pencil from me. Good job.

Bitter-sweet. I liked it. And…(great big pencils for this) I wanna know what happens!!!!
Abby
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Congratulations on the win!

This is truly a great story in 1024. Congrats on the win.

Lovely and kind of inspirational. It’s a nice message of hope and then of giving back once you’ve found that hope.

Thanks for all the congratulations! It’s my first challenge win.