What a lovely story and leaves open to the imagination all the great things these two men and their counterparts will accomplish in the future.
Also, nice visual with the boats.

I love the concept! The line about the clouds playing peekaboo with the sun was a great visual.

Neat idea, and I like how you really set the scene before the time travel twist and pay off.

what a twist!
Time does burn, in light in your piece. Very graphic and less metaphorical. :)

I really like the concept and the idea. I almost like it better without the time twist at the end.
I’m sure firefighters feel that “time burns.”

Nice work. As an “inevitable time travel piece” I think you did a better than average job.
Slight nitpick- Mountain is misspelled toward the end. And I agree with Kihd, that particular line drew me in to the story.

This is bananas. It definitely leaves the readerwaiting to see what will indefinitely happen. This is amazing

I love the concept, and you did a great job setting the scene. Now I really want to know what happens when the math prodigy wakes up!