Very tragic and well put together overall in terms of the message and the mood. Starting sentences with ‘And’ really didn’t work here—seemed to disrupt the flow.

Yeah. I agree. I’ll take another look at it later.
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This starts out kinda hopeful and peaceful, but you did make it sad at the end.
I’m left asking, can a soul fix itself?
and also, ‘why not this year?’ but i know several people who are trapped by circumstances and I understand completely the ‘not this year’s. :)

Really great job on whatever editing you did. This read fantastically from start to finish.

Also, I got a giggle right off the bat with the raspberry candle, as I had just featured one in a story upon which you just commented, prompting me to come back here to take a look at your stories.

Whew, it’s a good thing I’ve been watching Dr. Who just now or I would have never followed that myself.