Ooh, quite the predicament told carefully and slowly from the waking perspective of your protagonist. I liked the ebb and flow of concern as he checks the bag…whew, saline…another bag…can’t see it! Oh crap? Maybe? Nicely done.

Minor typo thing, I think you’re missing a ‘from’ in the sentence about the detergent smell in the pillowcase.

ah yes, thanks! I have plans or this guy…

Your description is so rich. It is hard to imagine that you accomplished such imagery in so few characters.

That makes me smile, stargazer! I am humbled.

I am going to take this series and rework it as a short story.