I wrote the sequel on paper in one of my classes today and forgot to comment! I liked this, there’s a subtle tension between her role as maker of the protagonist and the maker of the dead man. I also liked the way it tied back into Nascent Flames. The only part that confused me was the way that the last two bits of dialog were on separate lines but had the same speaker.

Wicked stuff, and I do like the combo of explanation/exposition along with just enough action.

Who is speaking the last line seems a bit muddy. It makes more sense for the vamp lady to be saying it, but the way it’s a new paragraph makes it seem, by convention, as though the protagonist is saying it.

You are both completely right! I missed that, to be completely honest. I have edited, to fix.