Nice. I really like how you played with my head on this one. At first, it seemed like you were going with a bit of a happy ending. Maybe the guy wasn’t a drunken fool after all. When you turned a bit of infidelity into an unexplained body, I was very pleasantly surprised.

Had to read a few times due to confusion between the bathroom door and the shower door. I think I just need to read more slowly.

Fixed, now I demand a recount (jks). =D

Fixed? You’ve still got past and present mixed in like crazy. I had trouble following just from that standpoint. Overall, I like the idea and the intent certainly, the bad to good to way worse transition. The execution was just sloppy on this one.

OK, now it’s fixed. I fixed the bit Jae said before. My issue was emulating hellbilly’s style.