Holy…. hmmm… had to read this a few times to untie all the “didn’t” knots. Especially at the end.

Written confusingly, but that appears to fit the situation described….

I’ll probably come back and read this a few more times.

Thanks for the mental workout. x3

Yep, hard to follow with the double negatives, but I see what you were going for. Thank goodness it wasn’t a full length ficly like this.

I too am a bit confused by the double-negatives. But it was a good story. A tragic, heartbreaking, tale.

Hm. I think the story needs the double negatives to have the meaning I intended, but as the author I’m going to be pretty biased. My intention was to always use the phrase “didn’t not” so that it is easier for the reader to see the same structure and ‘blot it out’ mentally.

As an experiment, I attached a sequel “Positive” that removed the double negatives but kept the individual meanings of each line intact; I think it doesn’t have any of the same overall meaning that this story does, but I’m curious as to the opinions of others.

As an experiment for my own curiosity, I also attached a prequel “Middling” which simply removed every instance of the word “not” with no regard to the story’s meaning. While it makes perilously little sense as a narrative, I kind of like it.