I used the break up you suggested, Rose (ties that tether part) I rather like it… a lot! not set in stone just yet because I want to make sure the preceding line matches the flow . Thank you :) I might have never thought of that on my own— your input is really important to me.

Cool! I feel like I’m doing some good…

It’s what I heard when reading it. Glad you liked it.

I’ll keep telling you what I think.

I didn’t know what defunct and verklempt meant before you started this… XD