I like it a lot, what/who is the old lady looking for?

Basically someone who could teach her. I mean, she has traveled the world and knows a lot, so the one who knows something she does not. ;)

I felt like this was a vocabulary challenge, so many big words for a smart gypsy! I’m not sure if it added or detracted from her character, for me.

Agreed, I have to watch that. :(

I was actually thinking the same thing. Kat I know you so I know it’s not the case with you, but a lot of people use big words when they can’t write a decent story without them. They feel their lexicon of long words is a fair substitute for their lack of storytelling ability.

Also Kat I can’t help but get into a rhyming head bob when I read your first comment lol.

Thanks Kev! You know how I love to rhyme!

Roses are red;
Violets are blue;
You look like a monkey;
And you smell like one too

K.P. Monkey leaves banana peel on Kcore’s face. ;)

Okay, so it deleted my first try at a comment, so you get the short version.

Yep, all the big words felt like a distraction.

The first paragraph was rough with either a fragment that didn’t work or was that a tense change for the verbs?

Overall though, I like the idea as well as the tension between the Christians’ interest and disapproval. That felt very palpable, at least how she experienced it.

I have to say there was a lot I didn’t like about my writing this time, but still liked the story enough to publish. I felt the longer I tried to fix things, the more mangled they became. I agree and appreciate everyones comments , thanks! :) really helps!

This is a tough and competitive entry that turns this challenge into a serious horse race.

I like this interpretation of the basic premise