I love how concise this challenge makes you write: no additional unnecessary words. It gives the piece a poetic lilt. Strangely enough, “suffering seizure” sounds gorgeously Victorian to me. Nice work.

Nice job. This is a fun challenge and you nailed it shut like a coffin lid.

whose, not who’s. That is the longest sentence ever. I’m so glad we do repeat words in real life, or suffer grammar and sentences like yours! Nicely done!

I made some minor edits. I hope it no longer causes you suffering, Elsha.

lol, yes that is better! i didn’t mean to be harsh, I realize it may have sounded that way, only to say that this challenge encourages some bad grammar! it’s okay though, we all need to stretch our minds. it’s not your fault, it’s the no repetition rule, and you put forth a valiant effort! I dislike my entry. and i think i may take a second stab.

I’m coming away from this with tears pricking the corners of my eyes.