The three little pigs told as druids with henges, culminating in stone henge. Cute and a neat idea, but definitely feels like you could have done more with it.

This is pretty funny, but I feel the same way. Try using more “show not tell”… less commentary, more details. I do like the concept though.

Thanks for the feedback to both of you. Part of what I was going for with this was to tell the story in exactly 100 words, which is part of why it’s so short. Maybe I will do a bit more with it, though.