Anybody want to jump in and give the guy a name? Or bring in a new point of view/character? I’m open to anything. I think I already have the ending planned out, so don’t kill him off…just yet.

Great vocab in this one. Someone hit the thesaurus hard! I’m all for hard thesaurus hitting—— ‘symphonic menagerie’— I love the word menagerie. I thought that this piece of a line was particularly strong— “…dead due to a fleeting thought.”— I mean wow, that phrase has clarity and sound appeal (alliteration, and even imbedded rhyme ‘due to’) and it’s concise.

I may try to add to this later tonight or tomorrow if inspiration strikes.

PHIL!!!!!!!!!!! NAME HIM PHILLIS JHONNY BOB! XD no jk but good story

Now there is an attractive name! Total chick magnet. Phil is nice.
Thanks for the comments!
Tad- a sequel would be appreciated! I have the ending somewhat written out, now it just needs the fluffing in the middle.

Your are officialy sequeled Kihd. Hope I fluffed it enough. His name is Phil. lol