Totally adorable portrait of young love, especially there at the end. Been there and melted those same pennies.

Minor kibbitz, towards the end of the first paragraph, might, “…move with casual deliberateness,” work better? The two adverbs in a row just don’t seem to sit well with me, but I’m rather particular, I know.

yeah, I didn’t like that either, but posted until i could something better..

fixed!