Hmm… I may have to completely revamp this. I haven’t expressed my point clearly. Or perhaps this should be bypassed altogether. I will not be offended should Eddie-Joe (or otherwise) choose to branch off from the previous part and ignore this completely. It is most certainly not up to par, with any of the previous installations. /sigh

Just so you know it wasn’t I who selected four pencils and then shafted you on a comment… haha, wtf’s up with that?

I see potential. It’s a good first draft. It has 5 pencil promise.

I like it, very quick and intense but feels appropriate to how the story has been going. Can’t say why, but it feels like a scene out of an anime movie, which works here.

I think this lil fic just mortered in all the lil loose feelings and vague description, i may have overlooked. i think it is good. i like pencils galore. We are having too much fun with this series the last time i had this much fun i needed a bailbondsman and a shot of antibiotics.

Last time I had this much fun I needed a stretcher ;P

Do those even work i used one before but didnt get any taller.

Yes, but now I’ve become a super mutant like Mr Incredible.

lol, you two.

I can see you struggle to get your point across. Either way it moves the story foreward and that is GOOD!

I like Gore’s observation of the changes and that he finds them beautiful.

Is there any chance that this arc and the spin-off could come to some sort of fusion in the future? Or, has my mind turned to mush?
I think I need a stretcher.