I appreciate the simplicity and clear nature of what you’re saying. The structure is undeniably sound— in the 2nd stanza (or what I see should be the 2nd stanza) renewed is one more syllable than stew, whereas forever is one more syllable than ever (imbedded and slant rhyme :) ). In the first stanza— not, price, dice, pot, are all perfect rhymes. So my one critique would be to put a line of space between the two stanzas I’ve identified. But that’s up to you. Too perfect and simple to be rated (it’s not a 4/5 or a 5/5) it just IS to me. It’s there.

It doesn’t take enough of a risk to be rated 5/5, but it also isn’t bad enough to be a 4/5…. so there you have it— it just IS. If you get me at all, haha.

It happens sometimes, what can ya do? Who doesn’t like a nice dip in the stew?

And simmer down, Tad! We don’t git you.

then git out the way

short, sweet, painfully teenage angsty, and vivid.

Short and sweet!

Poignant, and hopeful.

I don’t usually do this kind of short poem. It looks strange to me but I was proud of it.

Thank you everyone for your comments.

Why do you rate me 3 Jae? If I lost 2 points off you could you at least tell me where >.>

My personal rating system differs from what may be considered “normal.” I find most rates tend toward 4’s and 5’s, and little else.
For me, 3’s are neutral, while anything above or below is indicative of how much I like or dislike the story.

I think your rating system is flawed but fine. I choose to erase your rating from my mind.