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This is a really vivid scene and the light touch on backstory works well. The subject matter is strong enough that you could dial down the description — like “A wave of sadness filled his heart” — because it’s redundant; the scene is already conveying enough without need for authorial intervention.

Good piece overall!

Strong subjects and emotions call for concise expression. Beautiful and touching!