Straight up awesome. I love the level of detail, especially the little comment about Monet. Also liked the little hints at something about their departure. Great job!

I read this while listening to The Book of Eli soundtrack. So real, I don’t know what else to say.

Pure poetry, mate. Your descriptions are beyond lovely.

I love that spring, with its new warmth and potential, is opposite this tragic quarantine of death and despair. This deserves a lot more than 5 pencils!

A beautifully mastered scene. Everything flows enticingly, tragically well.

My only complaint is that you could probably have simply gone with “fresh spring trees” and the “green” would have easily been implied. It feels just a tad too cumbersome with that chain of three adjectives. Otherwise, a brilliant piece of writing that begs for more!

Noted and Fixed. I was going for some kind of color contrast there, to blue and yellow, but of course the color green is a given in fresh spring trees. A No Brainer there. Thanks!