Trust the poet to write a beautiful study of suicide. : )

I liked the part when the poem started. The first para seems a bit out of place though.

Thanks, guys! And Mystique, the first paragraph is meant to convey the narrator’s uncertainty (i.e., the metallic taste in her mouth illustrating her fear), which would explain why it doesn’t fit in with the rest — by the second paragraph, she has resolved to do it.

The metallic taste indicates blood to me, and I think of her as broken, about to die anyway. Thus, she chooses how, instead of waiting for it. Which, I guess, is what suicide is all about. We never know how much time we have left, but here I feel like you gave her not much time at all.

I do agree that she could have done with a bit more character development. Alas, such are the perils of 1024 characters. ;)

it’s good to leave mystery, i just had the feeling she was dying anyway. :P

Beautifully written and yes became quite poetic. I became a bit confused at first as to where she was. Thought she was hitting the stones not using them as wieghts for a terminal swim. But the imagery stuck with me longer than the confusion.

Thanks for your rating and comment, Tina! :)