the mothers always die at the beginnings of good disney movies.. so I know you have something big planned. That, and the title says ‘chronicles’. Some grammatical errors pull this emotional moment down. Try reading it out loud.

@Elsha- I was just thinking that! It makes me wonder about Walt Disney’s childhood.

Heart jerking story, it reminds me of those “Land Before Time” movies.
Still, do the copy/paste into Word trick. It should clear up the grammatical and spelling errors, and I’m pretty sure it’ll tell you where to make a new paragraph.

Did you choose “Shakira” because of the song “She Wolf”? Haha, that’s the only connection I can make at this point. :)