CREEPY! Desire can be creepy sometimes.
Liked: “stepping naked; coming nearer;
you can’t hear her” and “You are eyeless
this time; timeless”
Might need to be marked Mature.

I made some changes, Tina. I think it reads better… there’s no more cussing or comedy (that’s the down side, haha)… but that stuff didn’t fit with the creepiness well. Thanks for the comment.