Nice build up to a classic, Biblical word. The second sentence in the second paragraph is a really cumbersome run-on that could use an edit. And the third from last paragraph suffers from the same problem. Lovely descriptions, just some technical missteps along the way. I know you’re going poetical, but what you’ve wound up with is half and half, just enough grammar to make it prose and just enough poetic license to make it look sloppy in light of the other structure.

I love how you described her tears as “pearly”. There some really eloquent parts in there, especially the first sentence. I also liked the sentence about the winged horses; partly because I’m not sure I understand it, and partly because I like not being certain about it.
Good choice of favorite word! :D