Haha. This one was inspired a lot by Stephen Baxter’s “No Longer Touch the Earth”.

So, instant kudos for use of the word ‘dirigible’, which is possibly one of the coolest out there.

But even more kudos for a well-crafted piece – it works well because you didn’t feel the need for line-wasting exposition which gives us every detail – there’s depth in ambiguity!

Very visual, like the prologue to a big sci-fi epic – perhaps it will be eh? Good work – MH :)

Thanks, MH. :D I appreciate the comment and the kudoses.

I edited it a bit, actually, since I didn’t like the italicized line very well.

And thank you for describing it as visual! I actually wrote this as a challenge to myself to do improve myself on those sort of things.:D

I’ll echo MH’s comments with regard to ambiguity. With the limitations of the format here, ambiguity isn’t a bad thing.

The only thing that gave me pause was the bit about the dirigible ‘plotting’ its course south. I understand what you’re trying to say, but I suggest that ‘plot’ isn’t the right word.

When you mentioned the “German outpost,” I was bracing for a change in the narrator’s perspective, though keeping it in the cabin when I expected otherwise added a nice element of the unsettled to the reading. Yet another ficly that could have benefited from a few hundred more characters.

Thanks for the comments! I have edited to try and accommodate the stuff.

Lovely descriptions and very majestic. I don’t think I entirely followed what he was crashing into or what the whole scene was, partly due to not being a big steampunk buff.

Thanks for the comment.:D

I don’t actually think a lot of steampunk tropes apply in this particular fic, since the primary defining thing about the universe of Baxter’s “No Longer Touch The Earth” was the Aristotelean cosmology.

It’s good. So visual. Good Job (:

Thanks.:D Though apparently the last part is a bit muddled. I will try to fix that.