Oh, a kidnapping. Took me a bit to piece it all together. Nicely done with in-the-moment details that don’t stray into exposition at all but wind up sowing enough information for the background and situation to be figured out.

This read like a longer piece yet still brought the scene forward powerfully!

like: J.R. looked at me in the way someone looks at a bug that has dared to crawl on to the dinner table.
and: when it started to boil behind his eyes.