What I love is that you wrapped back in the fact that the possessed daughter had made it out of the confines of the castle to appear in the hero’s room way back at the beginning of the story. That was awesome and bonus continuity points for that. Very exciting action which all serves nicely to cement Feyald’s character. Also appreciated the continuation of humor, still at poor Haltstead’s expense.
As denoted, I had a lot of time to think about what should happen next. There’s a lot that influenced the outcome. My main goal was to imitate THX’s style, an incorporation of subtle humor and intensity of plot. Looks like I nailed it. Thanks!
The trick is staying up until 2am to write these things. My brain is too tired to get in the way, and I can actually be creative.
Jae 
Tina Murphy 
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