The amazing poem that inspired this is “Annabel Lee” by Edgar Allan Poe. In case you have not read it (we all should), here is a link:
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/annabel-lee/

We read that poem in English, but I really didn’t associate it with your poem until I read your comment. This is great! My favorite stanza was the third one, but my favorite line is “Deny the loss but not the love”.
I also thought your choice to use the first stanza as the last was interesting. It made for a nice cycle.
Overall, it was very impressive. And our survey says… five pencils!