A fantastic prequel. The dialog is chillingly real, and the emotion seemingly bursts from it. I like the direction you brought this, setting up for the sequel in a way unlike I pictured, which is undoubtedly a good thing.

I thank you.

Thanks Breaded. It’s good when the unexpected happens, looking forward to the sequel.

At first I didn’t think I would like it, but by the time I got to the end, it worked.

It’s hard to walk the line between dreamlike dialog that doesn’t have to make sense and something that is hard to read. I would recommend starting on a more easy-to-read line to drag the reader in, and then bring the weirder stuff once the reader is hooked.

Good point, thanks. Re reading it myself, I see what you mean about thinking you’ll hate it to start with.

Thought is hard to integrate into a face to face situation.