it’s a tunnel, with a bright light.. i see the light.. and… no, don’t go into the light!!!
I just get the feeling that the ticket taker is the conductor on the train to the afterlife. :)

Is having a ticket on this train like having a “new lease on life”?

The “eerie” part was very subtle. “I smiled behind my mask” yah!

He “would enviously guide” his visitors back. Nice character development.

Nice line: “Wherever they expected to be, it wasn’t here.” However, I don’t know if it is clear where “here” is. Is this train coming or going? Does everyone make the trip “on one side of the train or the other” or on one side of the tracks or the other? It’s early and I haven’t had my coffee yet, so that might be the reason for the confusion. =[)

Nice work, I enjoyed it very much.

@M. Abran – You have questions about this piece. Robert might answer them or he might not. Regardless, why not try answering the questions yourself by writing a prequel or sequel?

@Robert – Nicely written. The pace is perfect. IMHO ‘Conductor’ is a better term than ‘Ticket-taker’ because of the extra connotations that it carries. Perhaps it’s too obvious, though.

August, I would love to write the sequel or prequel but I don’t feel qualified. (You’ll probably just pick it apart anyway! =[) )

Robert, as I said, I liked this piece, it just seemed a little inconsistent that’s all. Maybe it’s just me? Maybe I’m a little off – I don’t know.

Cool story. I can’t say I totally followed everything, especially the idea of some people coming back and the different sides of a train, but it’s a really cool visual and idea. Nice use of the prompt.