Sounds like good timing! (Since I never really got into pokemon, I’ll assume all your facts are correct.) The only thing I found was in the 2nd paragraph, 5th line I think you meant ‘crushed’. Other than that, it was a great story! Thanks fir entering. :)
Pokemon fan fic? I was not expecting that at all. It’s exciting stuff, but the ending felt like it devolved into some repetition, maybe, or just the way I read it.
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