Interesting. The story starts off very casual, finding a radio station and all. Then it jumps to a sort of espionage tale – maybe a little too quickly? The end of the second paragraph was a bit too “cloudy”, I think? You might want to re-work the dialog a bit as well. This story has promise, for sure.
Interesting.
The story starts off very casual, finding a radio station and all. Then it jumps to a sort of espionage tale – maybe a little too quickly?
The end of the second paragraph was a bit too “cloudy”, I think? You might want to re-work the dialog a bit as well.
This story has promise, for sure.
Sir Bic