Awesome ending and a very eerie, strange scene. I thought some of the fragments in the middle could have been clauses or full sentences, but I’m kind of being a stickler. Overall, very effective piece.

Well done.

Her black eyes branding him. – nice line.
Starting a sentence with: Would destroy this fragile thing… seems like it needs an “it”, maybe?

Humorous and “true" ending.

Thanks for the comments! I deliberately wrote fragments in that middle section to match his fragmented emotional state, but I might consider tweaking that section after reading your comments. Thanks again. :)