Nice twist.

A capella Stories – Dialog without narrative – are difficult to sing. There is no music to hide disunity of harmony. There are no trailing crescendos to hold notes the singer cannot. You took a risk, but did it well. The rhythm was a little off at the end, however.

I was about halfway through, thinking that maybe this should be labeled Mature, and then you dropped the bomb. This is hilarious! I love the part about it “not being like the moveis at all”.

Loved it. The whole virginity parallel to killing worked really well, both on the humorous level and on a level of understanding the character’s feelings.

nicely paralleled, I mimic THX. Since it wasn’t mature, I was watching for the twist. I knew it was coming, but not what form it would take. :)

So brilliant I need to change my underpants

Thanks guys! I admit, I love doing this style of writing. I’ve written a book or two, and in one of them, the whole first chapter is nothing except dialogue between two people.

@Kihd and ElshaHawk
I’m glad it surprised you guys!

@Sir Bic
I know what you mean about rythmn: by the time I got to the end, I was way over the limit, and I had to start chopping chunks out. The balance of the ending was put out by this, unfortuanately.

@zxvasdf
Maybe I should put a mature warning on it after all, if it has that sort of effect!