Here is my source: http://www.nydailynews.com/ny_local/2011/04/05/2011-04-05_24yearold_pilot_who_landed_on_queens_beach_kept_joking_to_jfk_air_traffic_contro.html

I wanted to highlight the difference between pranksters who make phony phone calls and the brave men and women who sincerely respond.

Heroes enjoy having fun too, but they know when it’s time to be serious.

A fun little story and the visual of the guys cleaning to classical music is a good one. I got a bit lost in the middle, somewhere around the teasing I think. Still a fun vignette of every day life for firemen though.

Thanks Doc.

I didn’t feel I was clear about the teasing part either. I had sought to express the pride and diligence of this volunteer fireman. I wanted to show that Bill had a reputation for being the first of the first responders. The voice over the intercom anticipated that Bill would already have his boots and coat on, so he was teasing him about that.

I changed it up a bit but still feel it may need more work. Any suggestions would be appreciated.

This is just the sort of bread-and-butter entry that earns high marks in a challenge. Impeccable research combined with intelligent interpretation make for a terrific slice of life story.

in ficly there is no time or space to establish character, so it has to be done on the fly – very well done here. We meet and get to know the firemen and get a sense of what they do.

Well written and well chosen.

i had to read this more than once it demanded i follow i like that

switching between bill and billy, while you meant to convey the lighthearted tone, made me think there were two guys instead.
A great job overall, tho.