Compelling.

Looks like I found me a new Ficly series to read. I think this works well without the all capital ending, I feel the words should stand for themselves and that capitalizing spoon feeds the reader, somewhat.

Very gripping narrative, all throughout.

yeah, go back and read it! then sequel! What’s Dakota going to encounter next?

Ooh, that’s a horrid turn of events. Really funny how each person’s installment only makes things worse for her. I liked all the little details seaping through the narrative in this one. That second sentence was a doozy, but I don’t think it’s a run-on, just a bit cumbersome, so a matter of style, I guess.

yeah, i just wanted to smoosh it all in there.. I can probably break it up..