“It landed somewhere amidst some tall grass” seems to carry some contradictory ideas. “Somewhere” carries ambiguity, but “amidst some tall grass” seems fairly specific. In addition, I suspect that it’s the angry huff that the woman is dissatisfied with, and not the landing of the core amidst some tall grass. The paragraph wouldn’t suffer if the sentence were removed completely.

“Nestled in between trees that became a forest behind it” seems a bit convoluted. How about “Nestled between trees on the edge of a forest”?

“Stumbled feeling” should be “stumbled, feeling”. “Seen it” should be “seen, it”.

Your final sentence looks like it might work better as two sentences, split at the dash.

It has taken me a while, but I have read the entire series and love it. You all are doing a great job, five stars for everyone! Can’t wait for the next installment.

The Sun is wonderful! From the bitter cold of a winter apple to the dawning of a new day; this is why I love Ficly and this series, especially. I can’t wait for Jessica’s return, and long to see where she will takes us next!

Read it from the beginning here: http://ficly.com/stories/21492