I love the tone here. It’s very Buffy—not to say it’s derivative. Sounds like our hero can duck out at the reception and save the world.

Suggestion: The line that includes “months and even years” is a bit clunky. Also, the speaker mentions knowing about the apocalypse only for months—though I suppose others could have been putting in the work.

This opening could launch a fun story.

Thanks for the critique! I’ll take it all into consideration.

It is kind of Whedonesque even though it’s completely lacking in trademark dialogue.

I like the casual reference to the boss, which immediately sets up the potential of a hierarchy fighting off evil. And that’s supported by the reference to co-workers later on.

It’s odd in a way because the title and the intial set up suggest that this is really a joke about trying to juggle two different lives but it manages to include enough detail to suggest it’s an actual event in a bigger story. And that’s a good thing.

Great opening. Had me hooked right away. I also thought you did a nice job getting the story elements across in the context of her semi-rambling train of thought about the situation.