Ha ha, oh weird.

Stalking blue rhino… I lol’d.

I think the exclamation mark should be inside the parenthesis after “I don’t have any money”.

on the lam, not lamb, cuz that’s too cute and fuzzy for running away to hide. :P
Loved the blue rhino too, but it got a bit ‘dream-sequence-y’ in the middle, with the fragment A smoke signal and the ‘appear’ ing of the woman. I think if you change it to ‘a half naked woman caught my eye’ or something less.. magical than ‘poof! she appeared!’ Oh and the smoke signal thing needs a semicolon.

@elsha, true for a girl, if she saw a half nude male. For a young boy its magical, like seeing an angel. They see a female nude body for the first time and they turn into Columbus and claim the discovery as their own.

I do agree with you about the smoke signals, not age appropriate, the teen boy would not have that perception and changed it.

Glad I made your cups shake.

well, he could have perceived them, but the smoke imagery in the drug store was just jarring.

Nice description! Turn into Columbus..

Since I’m raising two boys, I think I’ll have to remember that bit about the angel.. thanks for the insight!