Interesting.

Politics aside, this is really good. With a little paragraph spacing and few grammar tweaks, this could be great.
- Note me if you would like to know what I mean.

And just to let you know, I think using “Number-One” would read easier.

Seconded, needs some grammar tweaks.

Never hesitate!

Thanks, I am a bit clueless when it comes to grammar. It’s something I have to work on. I’m enjoying the ficly experience.

Main grammar thing I saw would using apostrophes for possessive nouns. The last bit was a little hard to follow with the explosion, but I liked the ‘in the head’ aspect of it as No.1 struggles with what should be a basic task for him because of something about this guy.