Je t’aime. Mine would be so similar that I’m not even going to write it.

Beautifully done. And I love how… English you sound! It makes me smile, even while this story hurt.

Oh, dear. It’s my middle class telephone voice coming out on paper.

I’m at a loss…

The writing is effortless to read. The content is vivid and emotionally abundant.

So well crafted.

Very well done,

When I was 12 I ran out of the room during one of Charles Bronson’s Death Wish movies. A maid was getting gang raped, I ran into the back yard crying. Not for her but for how easy it was for my brothers and father to watch it while munching popcorn.

I really think this needs to be tagged mature, it doesn’t limit its access so I think you should do it. Its pretty graphic, but still excellent.

Yeah, I meant to do that. Thanks for the comments.

Very well written. Words are used very well to create a clear picture of the whole scene. The emotions..well real strong ones, just have to affect the reader..its just so..as Tad mentions..effortless…its the writing that brings it out so easily. Nice!

I think this is the best thing I’ve read from you, Pandora Jae, and I wouldn’t be surprised if it won this challenge.

Oh wow. Thankye cthulu. That means a lot :)

I feel like I could write a story for this challenge about your story. But I wont…

It’s so well done that I keep coming back to it. But every time I do, I remember how badly it hurts to read, and I have to look away.

I’m pretty sure that’s a compliment. I feel like you know me well enough to know that, anyway :)

One of the best I have read!