Makes you wonder how one mouse could eat “the children”; honestly hard to wrap my brain around this idea since mice aren’t cannibalistic. Now, if this rat is in love with a cat, different story.

Go take a biology class, Mice are known to eat their young.

Allen, you are astoundingly thick.

Kusu, I know this is the only story of yours that I’ve read and I’m a terrible twinsly, but this is great.

Allen, you’re awful.

I’m going to be a douche and rate my own story five to cancel out the idiocy.

the irony here is that

It’s amusing. I think you’ve done as much with the premise as anyone could.

Communication is my forte; not impolite remarks. Shall leave it at that.

Maybe you should have communicated why you left him a two out of five better

AdorableKusu, it’s not a particularly original format, but you’ve done it very well and with some good humorous parts

Also I can’t wrap my head around why the formatting is so wonky

im awful at formatting is why

Funniest suicide note from a rodent ever.

Indeed, I agree with THX and found this amusing.
I wasn’t aware that mice eat their young, but it’s not an uncommon practice in the animal world, with mantis’s and spiders eating their mates..

Well, I’m amused. Hitting a cliche in all the right ways, think. The editing critique I’d offer is that you could probably shave down a few of the descriptive words without losing the tone – “the caring Mousington family… who cared,” for example.

I like this a lot, it’s a pretty great short read that doesn’t try to cram more stuff in that it needs to get across what it wants.

…Hahahahaha.

Is that imprudent? Oh well. Nicely done, and certainly original.

an absolute tour de force

thanks to allen’s advice, three of my baby mice are dead

I’d say dead as doormice if the situation wasn’t already tragic enough

that blood is on your hands

voting 5 to cancel out allen, the very dumbest commenter

Hey all, let’s be nice commenters, now. Misunderstandings happen, no need to get all uppity about them.

That aside, I found this both poignant and utterly amusing. I liked the formal, affectionate tone; I kept having to remind myself this was a mouse/rat. As ridiculous as the idea of a mousy suicide note is, you pulled this off beautifully.

Possibly the most original story I’ve seen here on ficlets so far.

ok look i have only been on ficlets one day and already yall are trying to turn me back into the old me, like a damn nightmare i reappear. STOP WITH ALL THE NITPICKING. Damn you could nitpick the Mona lisa to death too Gapp toothed eyebrowless gutter whore or you could see her for her beauty. Remember focus on the finger and miss all of the heavenly glory young grasshopper. This story was a mona lisa i can not think of any other story more original than a suicide note from a rat asking the mom not to eat the kids. and rats do eat their young.

I’m still laughing, I don’t think I’m even breathing at this point!
This was the funniest Ficlyt I’ve read to date! And definitely one of my favorites! Well Done!

hey and lone i love micheal jackson

…i feel like im kind of late on commenting for this sotry but….this was hilarious. i loved it. original and funny, it doesnt get much better than that

**story. sorry, i cant spell.

One of your best microstories; utterly charming and dripping with a dark humor. The prose itself is wonderful.